User blog comment:Damesukekun/Song Translating and Mistranslating/@comment-25340994-20180613200452/@comment-35531447-20180616162024

Should be Kuroi Kyojin rather than Gyojin, and 'oyoida' should be 'oyoide'. Most of it is accurate, but I would probably change 'When the dark, dark sky becomes red' to 'When the dark, dark sky is dyed red' and 'I swim in it, as I become a star. Please don't forget' to 'I'll swim in it (the sky) and become a star, so please don't forget (me).'