Talk:Megurine Luka/@comment-13493003-20150101153722/@comment-53539-20150103113639

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rjmsThcOGTQ

I apologize for using a MLP song, but it demostrates song writing at its most successful.

Basically there are two songs in this one moment.

The sirens start the intro, the pay off (for them) is their transformation sequence. Their song sign off or "ending" is the "now its time to finish you" line. The other song occuring is the Rainbooms, their intro in this is heard leding up to their transformation. Their songs pay off is Sunset shimmer entering and the ending is the entire crowd joining in the song that finally breaks the spell.

So if you seperate the Dazzlings and the Rainbooms, you get two strogn songs that could stand on their own (the Dazzlings/sirens being the better in my opinion).

Circus monster's issue is that its climax is the silent bit, which is fine, but the trouble is the song just stops... This is fine, but a stop or pause in music is only going to work if the following music is much more dramatic then what CM delivers, which is only a slightly better version of what it started.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5UeDiTdRg

In comparison to the song "Twaddles of a flue faker" the music is also the same, except Oliver sings in a higher octave making the song sound more dramatic. The layout is the same with a pause in more or less the same position, but the pay off for the song is more effective.

Both swap change the narration, but again... Twaddles works because when he swaps to "we" instead of "I" as the narrative, he is joined by OTHER voices. In circus Monster, when Luka says "this monster" it feels like a let down because the song doesn't suddenly sound personnel to Luka. there is no difference between Luka singing about "the" circus monster to "this" circus monster. If it had been me, I would have died down the BGM to sound mroe sad and quieter, like Luka is truly alone. That would have made her "this" sound mroe personnel and ensure she was truly alone in her problems. the emotional impact of the sound would have been enhanced, not lost.