User blog comment:Damesukekun/Song Translating and Mistranslating/@comment-27642523-20160423035134/@comment-1523675-20160423085123

IMO both translations are good. Yours is faithful and Hazuki's is beautiful. You know, faithfulness and beauty are conflicting qualities in a translation. Suggestion. At 1:28 and 3:18 自由に手を広げて歩けたのなら is "If I could walk with my arms wide open". This sentence literally means "If (I) could spread (my) arms freely and walk". If we mean "If I could spread my arms toward freedom and walk", we say 自由に向かって手を広げて歩けたのなら. This is a matter of word collocation.