User blog comment:Damesukekun/Song Translating and Mistranslating/@comment-36977550-20181217231649/@comment-11501835-20181218194405

(First video is country blocked)

The YouTube one is very awkwardly phrased, I would suppose it's one of those where a native JP is translating into broken English. I wouldn't count on it.

The wiki's translation is comprehensible and generally better, I could disagree with some of the choice in vocabulary and phrasing. For example,

I don't know if the translator knew that all the lines were connected to form one single phrase, because the English variant doesn't make sense as a full sentence. First off, ～といいな isn't really "I wonder" but it's "I hope". There is a clear pronoun implied in 刻み付けた (as opposed to 刻み付けられた). "Tattoo" seems a bit too informal to imply the gravity of the lyrics, I would use "engrave". The full phrase would thus be: "(And) within all those fun times / I engraved - the flavor of leeks / I hope, even now, that it remains"

There's also some tense misreadings:

そして気づくisn't past tense, it's present so it wouldn't be "and then I realized" but "and then I realize" ---...いちど...だけ...--- is translated as "once more", but it's more "just once".

I just randomly took some faulty lines and scanned them, but I would guess it's enough to capture the atmosphere of the song, which the first YouTube translation doesn't really flow right enough. I might redo the wiki's translation if I have time