Board Thread:Off-Topic Discussion/@comment-35301431-20150119202849/@comment-25352448-20150228050650

MeerkatQueen wrote: V3-CHAN wrote: MeerkatQueen wrote: Hard day. Working on an original song I need a break. Do you mind if I give a bit of feed back on the lyrics? Sure. Sorry, if I seem annoying and such. I'm just trying giving out advice.

At around 0:14 it kinda had this "ECHO" tune to it and was seeming more on the generic Crusher/Circus P like. Which is actually kinda hard to maintain without a catchy und to go along with the lyrics. Of course I bet you are working on that so yeah.

But I really liked the beginning where it seemed it was kind of taking a more slower BPM and I feel you should stick with that. Kinda like how "Lie" is a slow sentimental song but, still pretty awesome.

Than at 0:45 (I'm sure it's still part of the chorus) it seemed a bit weak with a lack of vocabulary.

I'm sorry if I seemed rude about anything. ;-;. I'm just giving SUGGESTIONS.

Nothing you actually have to use anything I said or whatever.